A MOTHER’S LOVE

Her words cut deep
like barbs of a stingray
sharp and serrated
tearing at my flesh
gouging holes at my heart
precise in its incisions
leaving me wounded and bleeding.

Her disapproval weighs heavy
darkening the mood
shredding my dreams
swallowing my light.

With one fell swoop
she casts aside
my life achievements
with taunts of irrelevance.

Like a beaten dog
tail tucked between the legs
I scamper back to my kennel
chastised for seeking
a morsel of affection or validation.

I brush off her ridicule
no different from before
steel my spine
reinforce my armour
but inside
the little girl weeps
and longs for her mother’s love.

 


This is my first attempt at creating a poem/prose for my creative writing class. Let me know what you think! Formatting, sentence structures, comma placement, full stops etc. And of course, what you thought of the creation.

Links to the previous homework tasks: Week One – A Slice of Life , Week Two – My Faulty Character Descriptions , Week Three – Short Short Stories , Week Four – One-Act Playwriting

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Creative writer and storytelling enthusiast, sharing snippets of my journey through life and parenting. Aiming to inspire, empower and ignite laughter with every word that I write.

7 thoughts on “A MOTHER’S LOVE”

  1. Wow! Kathy this is great. on all fronts – format, structure, and other technicalities. But most importantly, the content. The sad emotions of the girl in the poem reached your audience.

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